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Scootaloo's Diary is a leather-bound "Forever Pages" enchanted diary with her name hoofwritten in smudged permanent ink. It is hoofwritten by what looks to be a fairly young pony. The edges of the pages are all warped as if it has been dropped in a puddle or left out in the rain. Various pages appear to have things tucked within.

Entry 1:

Auntie Raincloud said I should start writing a diary with my memories of my parents. She bought me this special notebook that has lots and lots of paper, even though it's not very big.

Mama and Papa have become very sick, she says, and I may want to see these someday, she tells me. I don't know what she means. They just seem sick from some food, it's nothing too odd, is it?

Anyway, I feel like I might give this a try. I do like to write. Mama and Papa are in the hospital right now. Mama said she'd be fine, she's just a little sick. Just like I was thinking, nothing strange there.

Whatever, I'll give this a shot, but I don't see myself being one of those girly girls who writes in her diary all the time. I hate to waste such a nice gift, especially from Auntie Raincloud.

Last week we were out at the park and Mama and Papa seemed fine. Papa and I were playing and he was holding me up like I was flying, telling me one day I would be a talented flyer like the Wonderbolts.

Mama was watching from under a tree. She was just resting. We had been walking around the town for a long time. She bought me strawberries. They're my favorite. There wasn't really anything that happened since then, except Mama and Papa going out to dinner last weekend. We think that's where they got sick, other ponies in the hospital went there, too. Some restaurant.

I can't really remember anything else right now. Maybe that's why Auntie Raincloud said I should do this. I know my parents have done a lot of fun things with me, but I can't remember them right now. Small drawing of a frowning pony

Oh, also, the strawberries were great! I hope that once Mama and Papa get better we'll be able to go get more!

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I will probably submit these as independent entries, even if I make several the same day.

As of the entries on July 16th, this is 50k+ words!
November 16th marks 75k+ words!
December 2nd marks 250 entries and 80000+ words!
December 4th marks 100 favorites on deviantART!

*WARNING TO READERS* As long as it can stay in canon (that is, provided the show doesn't in some way debunk a key part of the story) this will be ongoing at the pace of the show. Elsewise it will go at whatever pace I come up with continuing ideas. If I ever feel like I will only be dragging it on for the sake of dragging it on, it will finish. I have no intention of killing any of the main characters of the show. I have no intention of making it end in any sort of global-scale tragedy. I intend it to be very slice-of-life in dealing with the hurdles thrown at Scootaloo in my interpretation. It won't be complete until I feel like writing more would be detrimental to quality.

THIS FIC WILL NOT BE: A slash fic, mutilation fic, murder fic, paranormal horror fic, or a clop fic. Ever.

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Given 2012-07-14
Scootaloo's Personal Diary - Entry 1 by ~Tails-155 weaves a story in-and-out through its source material, getting deep into the head of an adolescent girl. ( Featured by JZLobo )
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It is a piece that connects to anyone who has had someone get sick and to write down a memory of that person in a diary or Journal. I like how you describe what the journal looks like and how there are things in the book besides pages of the original journal. The emotion in the writing is strong and give a sense of what she is feeling as she writes in the journal. You might want to elaborate what her parents look like so the reader gets a sense of what her parents look like. It would make the story seem like she wants to remember how her parents looked that day. It would probably give the readers something more to relate to. The story is good and keep up the good work.
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British-Prophetess Featured By Owner May 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I don't know too much about Scootaloo (other than the fact some people has debated whether she is a chicken or not for some reason) as I haven't watched a single MLP episode. It really seems that she is close to her family and there seems to be a child-like innocence to her character that is kinda endearing. Very good so far.
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DevilsMatrix Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Student Writer
The child-like ignorance of this makes it perfect and tragic....
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Tails-155 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm glad you appreciate it! :tighthug:
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UraHameshi Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Student Interface Designer
Very nice! You did a great work with this writing :)
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Tails-155 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks C: How far have you read?
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FantasticMrRob Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Very good! Keep up the good work. Can't wait for the next part! ^^
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Tails-155 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
There's many right now :giggle:
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SpiritBrony Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012
This is cool, I love it :)
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Tails-155 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:aww:
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SpiritBrony Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012
:) :huggle:
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catluvr2 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I know I'm late, but CONGRAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAATS!
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Tails-155 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa(etc, etc, etc.)aaaaaaaaaaaaaaanks!
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Disneygamegirl Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012
Aww :'( This is really moving and I can't wait to read more xx
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Tails-155 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Just as a note, if you haven't followed, there's several new parts out now :aww:
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roamingtigress Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012
Really nicely written, emotional work.
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Tails-155 Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! :hug:
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roamingtigress Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012
You are welcome :)
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prinnylover101 Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
finally, a fanfic that doesn't involve scoots being an orphan
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Tails-155 Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Uh... lol... kind of?
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prinnylover101 Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
wait, you mean? don't tell me, don't tell me. I haven't read this yet, it's still on my waiting list.
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Tails-155 Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
XP
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topgun96 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012
aww this so adorable....why do i have this bad feeling though
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Tails-155 Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Read on to find out. o_o;;;
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Portmeirion Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Student Writer
I've read several entries now, and I must say, this is beautiful. Heartbreakingly beautiful. I love it, and I feel awful for loving it so. Poor, poor little Scootaloo... :cry:
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Tails-155 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Trust me, Scootaloo won't just be seeing a string of tragedies. It's not always sad.
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Portmeirion Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Student Writer
Ah, that's nice to know. Thanks!

*continues reading* :reading:
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LoidNerdy101 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
YAY MLP
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Tails-155 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Lol. Yes. MLP. :la:
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LoidNerdy101 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i havent seen scootaloo yet.
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Tails-155 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
She's in the first episode, and then again in Call of the Cutie (Citation: [link])
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LoidNerdy101 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, i need to watch more often
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Tails-155 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
X3
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MissJossi Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012
I have difficult to imagine what year it could be...
But if you're writing it changes a little between british and american English.
In the word color, it is that spelling in american english while in british english it's standing colour. There are many other words and I know that really many people, I don't know how many to say... but around some millions, maybe...?
Any way, it is great with this text I've read. Keep up the good work ^^
I just thought to tell you that 'cause I don't really know what people use to choose between british english and american english, but maybe it's not so hard. I really don't know by myself 'bout this but I just thought about it. You may start think about this now if you weren't thinking about it.
For so long what I've read it looks really good, mostly I'm looking for spelling errors in texts but there's nothing here. I hope it would be all great, this story that you have. I hope it'll turn out to be good and that many will like it/love it.
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Tails-155 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
C: Thanks.
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SingingFlames Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Aww, she's so innocent. You can tell something bad is coming, and she's completely oblivious. Her Aunt knows, and is trying to help her, so she can remember in the future. It's heartbreaking, knowing this happy pony's in for a tragedy. :( Poor thing. It really made me feel for her. Great fic, and grats on the DD! :iconcongratsplz:
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Tails-155 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks! Feel free to read on! :hug:

It ended up darker in the beginning than I expected, though I already knew she was going to be sans parents. I was trying to explain certain personality characteristics of her in the fic the way I saw them in the show. It ended up being more intense, but the outcome was pretty effective, if sad. I was shocked how capable I was of fitting things into the actual show's canon. I only had a couple headscratchers.
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SingingFlames Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You know, I've only recently started watching MLP and I don't remember her (from the 15 or so episodes I've seen). I do like the show. I think it's just cute as hell, and funny too. I will definitely read on. :)
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Tails-155 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:aww: She's a pretty spunky pony on the show, but I figured I could explain her tough outer shell as being perhaps a bit of an overcompensation for some tough life experiences.
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SingingFlames Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Makes sense. :)
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CMWVisualArts Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm not usually an MLP person, I'll admit that, but I read it anyway.
'Tis sad, this diary entry. She's completely oblivious to the situation her parents are in.
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Tails-155 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It continues in the comments section. C: If you're interested, feel free to continue! C:
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MisterTurtle Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012
Eet eez sad.

Congrats on the DD, but beware of the pony haters once they get here. :dummy:
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Tails-155 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Meh. I'll endure (I hope... protect me?)

Thanks! :heart:
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MisterTurtle Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012
I can't totally gaurentee protection, but I do have snipers, and trust me, they don't believe in the whole "love and tolerance" thing.
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Tails-155 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
XP
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Reesesforce Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012
Sad and sweet at the same time. Love it!
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Tails-155 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:hug: :la:
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Reesesforce Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012
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MarioMario54321 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012
Congrats on getting this featured as a Daily Deviation! :D Now, you should consider submitting it to Equestria Daily. :)
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Tails-155 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I got rejected by them already :(
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