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The youth are our future
     youth are our future
The lazy youth
I fear for the future
Need work experience
Need work experience, for your first job
Just get a job
Just get a job
Now hiring
   Just not you.

Those occupiers
Those lazy slobs, wanting free money
  Says the last Social Security generation.
Get a job
     Lazy slob
     lazy, wanting free money
Just get a job.
In my day, we weren't afraid to
     roll up our sleeves or flip burgers.
Get a degree so you don't have to flip burgers.
Burger flippers failed the game of life
PhDs flipping burgers
because s/he needs a job
To pay for loans
   for the PhD
Yes, I've graduated.
No, they're not hiring
Yes, I've applied.
Yes, I'm trying.

That lazy youth
Just get a job, stop asking for handouts.

I did my time, and what's the prize?
Nothing but a piece of card stock in a frame, and ten years searching
Yes, I'm trying.
Since when is it lazy to feel let down, for not getting a job in the field of the degree? The degree that took up a large fraction of my life?
Yes I'm trying.
No they're not hiring.

The youth are our future.

To hell with the youth.
Here's my response to This article by John Cheese, and this video.

Does this sound alright?

Is the repetition good or annoying?

What (if anything) could be cut? Should anything be expanded?

Anything else you have to suggest.

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oracle-of-nonsense's avatar
The repetition is really good, but perhaps a bit over the top? I wouldn't take it all out, but maybe not use as much, so people aren't distracted from the non-repetitive parts that have equal importance.